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Re: Til Death Do Us Part
Wow this made me want to cry a little bit. You can feel the love and in the very beginning it seems kinda like the speaker is being ignored by ...
Jan 28, 2008 -
Re: His face, My downfall.
I remembered trying to impress my old man, I think that instead of a comma you could use a period to give a bit of finallity to the statement. The ...
Jan 14, 2008 -
Re: Dark Wings--excert
wow, this is beautiful. I love the detail and how you drew the reader into the party. This particular piece is written with enough detail to be wonderfully declicious with ...
Jan 14, 2008 -
Re: Moonlight Sea Gull: Chapter 1
I had a bit of an issue figuering out which of the girls was talking and when, and some of the descriptions were a bit choppy. I did notice one ...
Jan 14, 2008 -
Re: Dark
I enjoyed this throughly, scared me a good deal ( and I was raised on horror so not much phases me.) The only thing I had an issue with was ...
Jan 13, 2008